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The Wondering Hermit by ~SirNaelyan:iconSirNaelyan:



I walked between sand and sea.
I heard waves pound the sand,
felt the world crumbling, crumbling, gone
and I walked on what world was left.

I walked among humanity, young and old
breathing the sea and the shaky world
on which I made my home. My only companion
was an empty, thorn-brazen conch.

I contemplated its weathered edges,
Old, beautiful, and wise.
It whispered how it used to be a home.
The waves crashed over my feet, into this mystery.

The shell breathed "ripped away,"
Sand collapsed through my toes---
The world gone. First the mollusk, then the hermit crab,
then the ragged hermit pacing the waves...
©2009 ~SirNaelyan
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Author's Comments

This is a revised poem from when I was much younger.

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I think, and I hope you don't mind me saying this, that I prefer this to the comparable 'Fragment'. This seems to be a more comprehensive and emotionally cohesive piece, if that's not too wishy-washy. While 'Fragment' is much more intense, it is also intense in a less specific way. It is somehow unchannelled, whereas the voice in this piece links the more abstract feelings with an identifiable intent that I find more attractive.

I did like both, however.

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